
Editing Secrets by Laura Backes, Children's Book Insider
Once youve plotted out your book, developed the
characters and written the last word of text, the real work
begins. As busy editors are bombarded with hundreds or even
thousands of submissions a year, its more important than
ever that authors apply their own editing skills to their
manuscripts before putting them in the mail. Checking your basic
grammar and spelling are of course important, but authors need to
go beyond surface editing if their work has a chance of catching
an editors eye.
* Trim, tighten, hack away. First, second and even third
drafts of manuscripts are almost always laden with extra words
and scenes. Take a break from your book and then read it through
with a fresh eye. Write down your theme in one sentence (what the
book is about, such as working through shyness on the first day
of school or showing how Thomas Edisons childhood
experiences influenced his adult life). The plot (or progression
of facts and events in nonfiction) is your vehicle for conveying
the theme to the reader. Ask yourself if each character and scene
advance the plot toward communicating this theme. And decide at
the beginning that you will give up your precious words and
finely-crafted scenes for the betterment of the book. Pithy
dialogue may be fun to read, but if it pushes your story off
track, its just a literary dead end. Take the publishers
suggested word limits seriously: no, you dont really need
3000 words to tell your picture book story about Freddy the Frogs
adventures in the Big Pond.
* The elements of speech. Well-crafted dialogue can be a
writers most important tool. Dialogue is not just there to
break up the paragraphs or show that your characters know how to
talk; ideally, it adds to character development, moves the plot
along and replaces sections of narrative. Each character should
sound like himself, with speech patterns and phrasing that are
unique. This is especially true with talking animal books. I see
many of these manuscripts where, if I took away the words that
identify the speakers, each character would sound exactly the
same. Dont have dialogue repeat the narrative and vice
versa; "Did you hear that? Someones at the door!"
does not have to be preceded by "They heard a sound at the
door".
* Show dont tell. How many times have you heard this? Its
still true. Comb through your manuscript for sentences that tell
the reader how a character felt (Sara was sad) and replace with
sensory descriptions (Hot tears sprang to Saras eyes and
rolled down her cheeks.) Avoid telling the reader what to think
about the story (Jason foolishly decided to trust Mike one more
time.) Instead, present your characters actions and
decisions to the reader, and let the reader draw his or her own
conclusions (incidentally, this is how you "teach"
without preaching).
* Wipe out passive writing. Search for verbs preceded by
"would" (would go, would sleep, would eat) replace with
the past tense (went, slept, ate). Also look for actions that
seem to happen out of thin air. "The door was opened"
is passive, because the sentence lacks a "doer".
Remember, the reader needs to visualize whats happening in
the story. "The wind blew the door open" is better,
because the action can be attributed to something, and it puts
the most important element (strong wind) at the beginning of the
sentence. Simply rearranging the words ("The door blew open
from the wind") puts emphasis on a door that wont stay
closed, making that the subject of the sentence.
* Be precise. One of the best ways to make your writing come
alive for the reader is to use exact nouns, verbs, adjectives and
adverbs. One well-chosen word is always better than three vague
ones. Adjectives like big, little, cold, hot, beautiful, scary
and silly; adverbs such as quickly, slowly, loudly, and softly;
and general verbs like walk, went, stayed and ate dont draw
a vivid picture for your reader. Of course, sometimes these words
are appropriate, but try as a rule choosing words that describe
specifically what you want to communicate. Words that sound and
look interesting are also a plus. Tremendous, tiny, frigid,
scorching, plodded, sauntered and gulped are more fun to read,
and they each lend an emotional overtone to the sentence (if your
character gulps his food, you dont have to tell the reader
hes in a hurry).
And finally, make sure theres a logical cause and effect
relationship between the scenes of your book. Each event should
build upon the ones that came before. The plot should spring
intrinsically from your characters; nonfiction should unfold
because of the nature of your subject and your slant on the
material. Its when everything comes seamlessly together
that you have a winning book. Make it look easy, but dont
skimp on all the hard work it takes to get there.
Would you like to get fresh, exclusive insight like this every month? Click here for a special offer!
|